This story had beautiful imagery and was very descriptive. The gym sounds of course were a plus. It's very realistic in that it reveals the feeling of wanting to fit in. We all want to fit in. This was a very creative way of expressing that feeling... I think it was too short though. I was left wanting to hear more! I wanted to know more about this girl and why she had no friends? We could of delved more into the essence of who she really is...