Piece Comment

Review of A Disturbance in the Force

This piece takes us into the weird parallel universe of serious gamers through an amusing story showing the sometimes blurred lines between "virtual" and "reality." The greatest strength of the piece is its storyteller, himself a former gaming addict, who relates his tale with verve and relish. I think the piece would benefit from substantial editing for length; cutting some of the less important details would speed up the pace of the story and make it more engaging. I also think the piece might work better without the additional narrator; at the very least, he should consider using a lighter narrative touch more in keeping with the offbeat feel of the story. Still, the piece is cleanly produced and silly enough to be scary. I laughed aloud when the narrator said, ten minutes into the story, "This is where things start to get a little strange." That was ten bizarre minutes too late.